Dear all,
For the thesis statement sentence homework. Considering almost sentences that begin with the word " I " in the following body paragraphs on pages 156 and 163, I also use " I " in the thesis statement sentence to make the essay sounds coherent, but I am not sure it will make the thesis statement weaker or not. Because I remember that when we did peer editing, we discussed that "in my opinion", "I think" or "I believe" make following idea weaker, we'd better talk what everyone knows to support our main idea. Please give me some advice, thank you!!
Have a good day ^^
Sunday 13 May 2012
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Thank you Rainbow Gaga for this excellent and timely post.
ReplyDeleteI was hoping that someone would raise this question. I don't see how you could write a strong thesis statement for Hartmann's two paragraphs without worrying about it.
I am sure that the discussion in the comments will help everyone to clarify and strengthen their understanding of the issues you have raised for us.
I believe how to write the thesis statement is similar to the topic sentence. We should not use the word "I think" or something like that since it shows your uncertainty in your opinion
ReplyDeleteThanks you,Poupee!! But now your reply make headache, I am deliberating how to write a new thesis statement sentence now....
ReplyDeleteAnd then there is the topic sentence in Hartmann's paragraph on page 163.
ReplyDeleteHartmann's use of "I think" in her example paragraph on page 163 is actually appropriate. The writer is not making any statement about the world or the way it is, she simply reflecting on her own ideas, her own thinking, and since she is in fact writing about her own thinking, it's right to say "I think". As we covered in our discussion in week 1, the writer says nothing that anyone else could present a fact or reason to prove wrong.
ReplyDeleteThis is not the sort of topic we would normally write about in an academic setting. Hartmann's purpose is to give us an opportunity to practise writing an analysis of a narrative, and it does that well.
For the same reasons, we saw this morning that in step 2 of the process of writing your essay this evening, research is unnecessary and would be largely a waste of time: all that a strong essay requires is for you to think and perhaps apply some ideas from "The Function and Meaning of Dreaming" (p. 151 - 153).
Don't worry, the next essay we write will ask you to state and support an idea about something outside of your head. It will require some solid research, and will not invite the use of such terms as in my opinion, and I think.